Moon Shot

Via Dave Kingsbury’s Moon Shot tanka challenge

Dave Kingsbury at A Nomad in Cyberspace posted a beautiful, evocative tanka today and challenged followers to add their own “in the hope that . . . the whole thing turns out to be somehow greater than the sum of its parts.”

Here’s Dave’s kickstarter tanka:

Eyes down for stray coins
Or lonesome tweets. So what, if
Dull skies lack twitter?

Where are the swifts blown? Summer’s
On hold till they’re back on course.

And here’s my response:

Of course, coins enrich,
as much as the swift’s sweet song,
while tweets leave minds dull.

Autumn, elevate my thoughts
on gentle, warming updrafts.

Y’all let me know what you think, if you would, and please visit Dave’s blog and consider adding your own!